Five years ago, I was a fucking slow writer. I mean, there are times when you take a few chapters to get to the “good parts”, but in this case, it took me sixty-four thousand words to get to the first detailed Dolcett scene. That is almost an entire romance novel just to get to a proper spitting.
A lot has happened since I wrote this novel. Looking back, I see a lot of flaws but there isn't much I can do about it. I'm really afraid to edit Derik's Luck but I'm going to do that anyways because it probably my second-best novel (and the only one to get fan art and fiction). But my writing skill has seriously improved. I look at this and Eliza and the Raptor and I can see what has changed. But that doesn't make this any less of a good story, just an older one.
Not to say that it was a bad scene, I really like this one. I like to also think that it built up rather nice over the last twenty one chapters since it is the reveal of one of the antagonists of the novel. I love the details of the spit. The idea of seeing it sticking out of some cute hole, that is one of the things that really kept me in the Dolcett world as long as it did.
Dolcett Girls 22: Bite of Heat (FFF fdom viol cann bond sn)
With so many things going on, the endless dreams of horror and cannibalism where a constant in Sonja's life. She didn't know where they came from or why she was suffering through them, but that would change with her next one.